For the books, I would suggest to have a roadmap as an introduction. Some concepts are very clear indeed for the authors, and have a specific, precise meaning for them. But the terminology may be confusing for non experts. It would be nice to offer a first-page, concise, definition of "collective mind", "knowledge federation", "polyscopy", "co-creation", etc. , and to see how each of these concepts relate to the others. With the current structure, at some points the reader may get confused: Sometimes it appeared that some concept was just an instance of another one, and later it appears to be otherwise.

Whenever possible, a real-world example of the application of these ideas , even in a small and limited prototype, may help to understand their possible application. Performance indicators and criteria used to measure success will also be helpful. A theoretical prototype, even a conceptally sound and rich one, may be not as good for these purposes. 

Furthermore, a "doomsday" perspective of the future of life on Earth may become a barrier for newcomers to approach these critical issues. The importance of these ideas could not be overstated, indeed. A more positive approach, as Thrivability (not mere sustainability), may be better to attract the general interest. I believe that, fortunately, some progress has been done in the last fifty years. There is more awareness about limited resources, environmental concerns, exploitation ethics than in 1970. At that time, few people was worried or even heard about these issues. Perhaps what tave been done is not enough, perhaps it's too late, but showing that some progress has been attained helps to think that the required efforts may be worthwhile.

Anyway, these are just my candid impressions.